This one is my favorite..so far.

I am not as fast of a reader as you are so forgive me.

This makes me feel like you have someone who likes to cheat

motion is him going from one girl to another and so on

he is restless

does not want to settle down

it is nice to get a focused picture from the lense of my life

wow..mreh

haha but all in all i really do like this one

"just a blur in my polaroid life;" works well in this to accomplish the differences in the speaker and the individual portrayed in the scene. I like how this concentrates on the central theme, and blooms from there. Good write. MD:77.

I love this. The imagery is amazing, welcome to my favorites list!

'just a blur in my polaroid life;'

this piece has a kinda rhythm to it, not too fast and not too slow

i like it a lot. there's something about it - maybe i just relate to it - i don't know. but yeah, it's pretty amazing

keep it up :)

Very much like it, great comparison and wording. Favourite line: "(you’re splitting seconds as i’m staring)"