Wow, I am really, REALLY sorry I am so late in reviewing all of your stuff, but I was so busy and then I went away and everything pulled me away from the computor. I am REALLY sorry.
I really liked this, but I have one suggestion. I see verse one, a chorus and a bridge. I think you may need one more verse, but it still is really really good. Once again, I'd love to hear the melody that goes with it. You always capture wht you write of so perfectly. Smiles for you!
~Danielle=)

Wow, that was...depressing. A good song to match my mood really. I loved the imagery very much. The last four lines of the chorus were amazing, but really, it all was amazing.

I wish I could remember how to write like this. It is wonderful, truly beautiful. Amazing job.

With love
Ashelin

I was going to pick a favourite part, but I couldn't decide. It's all so beautiful and so horribly true. *favourite*