i really like the first few lines, they're just so creepy. i also like the fact that this whole prologue is written as if by a vampire who finds humans strange and amusing. it puts things into prospective for the reader.

Aleksander! everytime i hear that name i think of the little 8 year old one form the rp!!
talk to 'trina and figure out when she's ungrounded

Interesting, I like it. Keep it going.

Yeah! Take THAT Twilight!

I haven't read the series yet, so I haven't fallen into the hype.

This is really good. I liked the description and the rich words. The idea is really good, too. I really liked it.

This is an intriguing storyline that ventures far past the borders of previous vampire stories. I look forward to reading more.

Wow just wow. This is awesome. I don't have any constructive critism for here. You missed one quotation mark thats the only bad thing I can say about this. You rock!

~Keep writing!~

This was amazing!! Absolutely intriguing making me want to read more. I only have complaints with the fact that "What you do with them is of your own volition merely formy entertainment." makes not sense to me and youcannot being one word. Otherwise it was totally state of the art fictionpress material.

~Keep writing!~

Hey Tori its me Phenix gotta say that was outstanding work
10/5 on my book lolz hope to see ya at school monday :)
Keep up the awsome stories s(^.-)-b

Hey, Tori too lazy to sign in, btu I've decided to call Aleksander is that ok?

That was great. I'm not just saying that. I hope you write more really you'll kill me if you don't. You have the makings of an auther. That was an amazing story compairible to pendragon and eragon and Maximum Ride.

Sorry, it took me a bit to figure out how to review this thing... A few minor grammar errors, more detail needed (but this is a skeleton, I think you said)...hm, what else...well, you of course must name a character after me, and they have to be cool and preferably the right gender...

(about ayla) oh, there she is... ^^'

i like. very nice.

oh, nu!! RYAN!!
... wheres Ayla...!?

Hn. Interesting... (i reviewed happy?!?) ^^