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| Midnight In Eden 2008-02-20 ch 1,  | abuseI love the parallel here. It's solid, interesting and the phrase "much as a/wave destroys itself coming to shore." is well crafted in terms of the line break. I do have to say that the description of the power before that is a little weaker in comparison though. Particularly because of the tense and the blunt wording, 'I feel' might work better than 'feeling'. Also 'powers'? Otherwise the 'them' feels a little awkward. Otherwise, again, I like this quite a bit. Midnight |