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| balloonfista 2008-08-08 ch 1,  | abuseAwesome! I wonder if guys like Callum really exist. Ri |
| gulistanlik 2008-05-11 ch 1, | abuseWoah! What the hell? I don't think Goths are generally like that. I mean they're humans after all and what Jordan did was not exactly humanly behaviour. Well shit. I like it. =D Congratulations on a job well done! gulistanlik |
| my name is grace. 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseLike I said before, loved you stuff, and this is no exception. It might have been cliche, but in a more vauge then some people write cliche stories. This wasn't all BAM! This story is cliched, becuause of the event leading up to it. Oh yeah, you said Callum's eyes were green, then they turned blue after the fight. Just thought I'd tell you. =) -Grace |
| Lily Llynn 2008-04-13 ch 1, | abuseOnly criticism is an inconsistency (first you say Callum has forest green eyes, later blue eyes). Other than that, this was pretty well-written, with engaging characters and an interesting plot. It's sweet that he stood up for her, and even though this is cliche and fluffy, I still like it. Hehe. An awesome addition to our c2 from Queen of Absolutely Everything. (: |
| BlueFireIce 2008-03-27 ch 1, | abuseI love it! Oh I love it so much! It is adorable and cute and sweet and ugh...too many words to describe it! I'd need a dictionary to find all the words ^_^ |
| arydesia 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuse“Piece,” Callum began calmly, his voice holding a razor sharp edge... --I think you meant 'Pierce'? or 'Peace'? Stumbling forward, I slammed the door shut harder than I met—breaking the glass. --'harder than I meant'? Sorry I sound so picky! I just notice these things... Anyway, I read your other oneshot and wanted to see if you had more - and I wasn't disappointed! Callum's character is very sweet and lovable, and Alex sounds like an interesting girl :) Write more! ~arydesia |
| LiME-GREEN-CAPES 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abusei love this, it's adorable :] |
| SparklingStar25 2008-03-15 ch 1, | abuseso sweet! |
| x3life 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseaw this waws so cute!! loved it =) |
| Kateena 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abuseCallum is so...cute! *squeals* |
| Pinkamoo 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abuseOoh, very cute. I like Callum. Oh, but that Jordan...that Jordan, my God. Why didn't she kick him and run like the wind - bullseye! He makes me mad. Hitting girls for practically no reason - hitting them at all...puh-lease. I care for my own personal safety and everything, hence the running part. But I also care for others, and I don't want them getting hurt because of me. Good story! |
| anonymous 2008-03-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis was really good. I usually don't leave reviews, but I am this time because this story shouldn't be rated M. In fact, I was close to not reading it because of the rating, but now I am glad I did. T would be better, because there isn't really enough violence to need the higher rating. |
| White Rose Blossom 2008-03-10 ch 1, | abuseAww, cute! I love how he asked for the kiss :D -Aria |
| Jevanminx 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseOkay I'm gunna go incredibly girly which I dont do very often. He actually asked OH MY GOD that is the sweetest thing I have ever read. It was a beating the shit out of people and then fluff but it was a good transition between the two. JM |
| Strangely Natural 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseIt was precious, a wonderful trip into a life one would be happy to have. Callum, sneaky Madison and the charcoal record piece moment made me favorite this, besides the warm feeling of wistfulness ensued by the last line ^_^ |