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| Autumn Maiden 2008-07-23 ch 24,  | abusehey its me again..i seriously cant remember if i got around to finishing your story and reveiwing so here is the promised review..although i dont have much to say apart from UPDATE PLEASE...also there was the bit when she was left for dead and then found by someone and the whole story suddenly does this huge shift and i was just a tad lost but eventualy caught on kind of...and i also seriously hope that she meets her cubs again...good luck finsihing the story =) |
| NeverFinished 2008-07-20 ch 24, | abuseHey, hey, still totally loving your story and waiting anxiously for the next installment in Silvertooth Blackmoon and Amberblood. I definitely think your story is worth publishing. It is far superior to most of the writing that can be found on Fictionpress, so keep up the good work. It's been a while since i've really read the last part, so i can't give you much constructive advice, but I hope this encourages you to keep up the terrific work. Yours truly, NeverFinished |
| Autumn Maiden 2008-07-15 ch 1, | abusewell...u already have drawn me in through the summary..it sounds very interesting...the first lines of ur story also work very well to draw the reader in at the very first glance...the only bit of advice i have at the moment is that you should consider spacing between every other line...at least i find that it is easier to read, compared to when its all crowded together...i should be doin homework at the moment..=)...so i will put u in favorites and hopefully review and read ur story fully very soon..i am looking forward to it..=^.^=...good luck with finishing it... |
| listentoher 2008-07-13 ch 1, | abuseThat's just harsh. I believe that there is no such thing as a bad story. It's just something that's unfinished. There is nothing lower than saying something so mean. If you dislike the story, then you don't have to read and review it. Your spelling, grammar, and description is good, but the big problem you have is organizing your sentences. They should be put in paragraphs instead of writing them on every line. It would make the story much easier to understand if you did this. I have to say that any writer who manages to write 24 chapters without giving up was great potential. |
| Eilinora 2008-07-07 ch 1, | abuseTch, yeah, you'll get it published, but at a vanity press with no standards, where romance novelists and wanna-be authors go to live out their dreams of being good writers. Not really anything to be proud of, you werewolf-loving, Mary-Sue writing loser. Being published and knowing how to write are two very different things. |
| misery sister 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseIt was very hard to read this because I'm not used to the spacing. All published stories have one entire space between paragraphs and dialogue, so this was confusing. |
| DigitalScripter 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseIt could be broken up a little better. With some reformating I think this could be a really good story. |