I really, really liked this. The second chapter more than the first. I'm an Indian too -living in India, though- and I totally get Saph and her insecurities. I was actually horrified when Byron mentioned dropping out, and then Saph was too! It was crazy. And the why-parents-are-still-together, totally true. Have wondered that myself so many times.

I really enjoyed your writing, and the humour, and the simpleness. I liked that this was so free of unnecessary drama. Basically, I loved it :)

the strawberry plant part is probably one of the sweetest things I'v ever read, especially when her brother waters it for her. :( so cute!

ah, I often worry about bringing a white boy home to my parents, because I know how hard it would be for them. my mother once said that if I do, he's better be worth it. haha.

I like the conversation they had with their parents though. low drama.

ooh, I love how you show how different they are, when he's telling her about dropping out of uni. and it's realistic that they fight, because they are so different, but I love that they can overcome that and be together :)

insightful and sweet. well done!

haha, wow, I loved this. it's very cute. you wouldn't think that byron and saph would get along, but they do and it works.

there were a few lines that I really loved, because they reminded me of my life:

(So she thinks studying is important and she has her life on a planner. She’s the only daughter of an immigrant Indian family- to be driven to succeed is a card that has been dealt to her before birth.)

yes!

and haha, ganesh!

also, "was your dance orgasmic" was one of the best lines :) and people can't see me blush either... I never really thought of it as a good thing, because I never really thought about it, except for one time, when I asked my mom why she blushed and I didn't and she was like "IT IS BECAUSE YOU ARE NOT VERY FAIR, MY DAUGHTER."

haha. I was like five years old and had no idea what that meant.

anyway, I like how they both seem like real, developed people. byron is so hilarious.

and of course, I love reading about bengalis... haha.

I love the Byron and Saph-stories. They're so incredibly cute. And the line "I like you too much to ask you to be with me if you don't want to" was just... great. Absolutely wonderful.

Anyway - very sweet story. I loved it. Good luck with your assignments! ;)

Aw that is so cute and sweet and well I loved it, it makes me want to go find my boy friend and just hold him for a while. this this really is a lovely and yet deep and insightful picture of a relationship that is very believable, well done.

that was cute, and well written.

' So she thinks studying is important and she has her life on a planner. She’s the only daughter of an immigrant Indian family- to be driven to succeed is a card that has been dealt to her before birth. '

you've pretty much described my entire life in two sentences.

Really cliche and kinda random but actually quite creative. Definitely funny, and a pretty well-written oneshot. Me likey. (: I'm very glad woodstock1969 added this to our c2! (:

It was definitely original, and Byron made me laugh. So did Shonar, with the elephant man comment lol
Loved it :D
~Mia

Aw! That was awfully cute. I loved it. :) It was like a little window into someone's lives - you could've written a long story about them as well, I think. But it was brilliant as a short story. Good work! :)

Great story. I thought it was really funny! You're a good writer, and the story was cute. I don't know what you usually write, but you defenitly have a talent for this.

Jo x

hee hee.

this was cute.

HAHAHAHAHA I loved that, it was a great plot line and it all followed through nicely. So good, Mr Brightside is definitly orgasmic.
JM

First off, I do have an account here... it just won't let me log on :(

Ok, so the entire time I was reading this, I was like, "now why does Shonar sound familiar?" until the end. I'm Indian and my family (not so much me) speaks Bengali... Honestly when you first described Shane, it reminded me of who I try to be as well as another friend of mine. As for the thing about how being a first generation Indian basically means you have to study and care and whatnot - SO true. I suppose I could continue waxing on about how you must somehow Asian yourself since I see no other reason why you would know Bengali, and on how I was pleasantly surprised by their nationality and whatnot but I'll stop here.

As for the story, I quite liked it. Your descriptions were interesting and not too drawn out, and I can perfectly picture the scenes. I found your idea of getting things thrown at the protagonist rather intriguing, and while I'm not Hindu, I couldn't help but laugh at the line about Ganesh...

orgasmic? okaay, not going to ask. but seriously great!

just to prove that i don't lurk ALL the time... xD

-loved- the story. 5 thumbs up! (with the possible help of much much surgery)

yay for cheesy dancing in front of bedroom mirrors. =P