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| Lily Llynn 2008-04-06 ch 1,  | abuseReally cliche and kinda random but actually quite creative. Definitely funny, and a pretty well-written oneshot. Me likey. (: I'm very glad woodstock1969 added this to our c2! (: |
| mia5081 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseIt was definitely original, and Byron made me laugh. So did Shonar, with the elephant man comment lol Loved it :D ~Mia |
| Kjersti 2008-02-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseAw! That was awfully cute. I loved it. :) It was like a little window into someone's lives - you could've written a long story about them as well, I think. But it was brilliant as a short story. Good work! :) |
| Joseph-Dreamer 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseGreat story. I thought it was really funny! You're a good writer, and the story was cute. I don't know what you usually write, but you defenitly have a talent for this. Jo x |
| Kurt Wagner 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abusehee hee. this was cute. |
| Jevanminx 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseHAHAHAHAHA I loved that, it was a great plot line and it all followed through nicely. So good, Mr Brightside is definitly orgasmic. JM |
| addicted2storiz 2008-02-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseFirst off, I do have an account here... it just won't let me log on :( Ok, so the entire time I was reading this, I was like, "now why does Shonar sound familiar?" until the end. I'm Indian and my family (not so much me) speaks Bengali... Honestly when you first described Shane, it reminded me of who I try to be as well as another friend of mine. As for the thing about how being a first generation Indian basically means you have to study and care and whatnot - SO true. I suppose I could continue waxing on about how you must somehow Asian yourself since I see no other reason why you would know Bengali, and on how I was pleasantly surprised by their nationality and whatnot but I'll stop here. As for the story, I quite liked it. Your descriptions were interesting and not too drawn out, and I can perfectly picture the scenes. I found your idea of getting things thrown at the protagonist rather intriguing, and while I'm not Hindu, I couldn't help but laugh at the line about Ganesh... |
| spring 2008-02-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseorgasmic? okaay, not going to ask. but seriously great! |
| Hell's first Icicle 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abusejust to prove that i don't lurk ALL the time... xD -loved- the story. 5 thumbs up! (with the possible help of much much surgery) yay for cheesy dancing in front of bedroom mirrors. =P |