love the rhythem... the only change i would make would bes "reminding you and SAYING you can't win"... that way you get rid of the extra "you" and it flows better.

This is really cool, I like it a lot! Great rhythm - it just flows off the tongue. Keep writing!

Anna _

Brilliant! just brilliant!

That's totally what it feels like a lot of the time, everyone's just waiting for you to trip up. And you just wanna make it just to prove them wrong :)

The rhyming is potent in its simplicity. The ambiguous ending is intriguing, intensifying the poem. :)