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| loveYOOinADVANCE 2008-06-14 ch 1,  | abusenaw! how cute! bet your happy aye *wink* LOL! |
| Momiji K. Sohma 2008-05-15 ch 1, | abuseAw! I loved it, I hope he feels the same way. |
| BrokenHeart4Eva 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abusei love it! its amazing and the imagry capture my imagination! right on! |
| kloun mannequin 2008-03-14 ch 1, | abuseoh my it's so sweet, I like: Pulling me closer so I couldn’t get away As if you were trying to say ‘Never leave me’ I'd love to feel this someday, true love I mean. it's a nice poem. |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseI wouldn't use sweet in both the second and third line.. it seemed a bit repetitive.. also you used look in the sixth and seventh line.. again I might change one to gaze or something You had a smile on your face as you said.. a bit wordy maybe... With a breathtaking smile, you said, or something to that effect I might change he's already caught my eye to he'd already... I think the past tense sounds better... The second night was just as great but last night I remembered the most.. I didn't like that line it wasn't really that relevant and it seemed too long... the reader doesnt need to know there was a second night if you're not gonna talk about it.. I might say, "every moment together was perfection/ but on the night I remember most" I love the part about asking and answering the silent question that was really nice... I also love the part "I almost exploded" and the lines about putting your arms around your waist so you can't get away and what they were saying.. that was a great description... I also like the ending a lot too The piece is really sweet and definitely something I could relate too... really nicely done |
| angel953 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseThis is so sweet! I love it so much! Hope all works out between the two of you. ~angel953 |
| Twilight Starr 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseAww, adorable piece. It sounds like things are going great for you. I hope they continue to go that way. Have a fantastic day. :D ~Twilight Starr~ |
| sweets555 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseI'm so happy for you kristie!! I'd say i hoped things are going well, but its apparent they are. |
| totallyinspired 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseaww so sweet! |
| Yusuf 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseWow. He must be one lucky guy to have found you. Nicely written. ~Yusuf |