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electric feel 2008-06-12 ch 1,	abusethe first lines are generic and then you start talking about tinned fish and for some reason that makes me like this. it is a quiet love poem that ends with much less hope than it started with. interesting idea with the haiku format.
One-Hand Clap 2008-04-24 ch 1,	abuseI thought this poem was beautiful, because I really could relate. I have the same 'falling in love with strangers' issues, especially when I'm on the train. it's like I'm in my own version of the Bachelorette (ugh. I just made a 'reality tv show' reference). The very words 'dimple your neck with drowsy kisses' is truly inspired. It's something I wish I had the intelligence to think of. A lovely poem. - Clap Trap
she smolders 2008-02-27 ch 1,	abuseI have the same problem. "Kind eyes" always pierce straight through to my heart; we're all a little lonely at some point of our lives. This short piece is cute and at the same time sad since I can relate with this so much. Take care - I'm slow with reviewing this days but know that I always do make the time to read your poems, even if I do not leave a review.
Basara 2008-02-24 ch 1,	abuse...where these stranged things of love dwell... nice...
Midnight In Eden 2008-02-20 ch 1,	abuseI like the first couplet but why is it italicized? I don't think it's quite necessary... Unless it's not part of the poem in which case I'd make it part of the poem. Otherwise, I live the simplicity of this and the wonderful enjambment you use. Really, this piece is one of few that uses enjambment well without it sounding gimmicky or stilted. The only line break that feels a little awkward is "drowsy/kisses". I think perhaps, just because the first line is a little too long. Otherwise, lovely work. Midnight
perpetual questions 2008-02-20 ch 1,	abuseThe imagery is quite lovely, nice work.

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