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| Aelfin 2008-05-11 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully written Your an amazing poet and i dont think this could possibly be a more perfect poem =] Aelfi x |
| Qzie 2008-03-06 ch 1, | abuseAww... that was beautiful. A wonderful expression of how you used to believe in fantastical things like fairies and, like you said, "I mock you 'cause/ you say you saw a fairy." It's like idealism turned into cynicism. It's sad... but I love it. Wonderful piece. -Qzie |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI really like the whole idea of a fairy tale and how we grow out of it.. it's something everyone can relate to and it was well written The only thing I didn't like was the beginning... I wouldn't use fairy again I'd just say one... since you use fairy in the first line and the next line... Other than that a really great piece.. I especially love the part about dreaming and walking away when the person is real PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon... there's a link in my profile |
| Tomorrow in Tokyo 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abusei think this expresses a lot of things everyone feels at some points in their lives. i wasn't sure where it was going at first, but it all came together in the end... good job! |
| WickedSilence 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseAdmittedly it took two readings to understand your poem. But, in the end, I can say that I like it. What I love is the paradox of belief and hope, how you contrast the two and introduce that theme through the fairytale concept. Although, maybe you should switch "there will be a happy ending?" to "will there be a happy ending?", because the first time I read that line I got a little confused. The lack of punctuation I get, considering it's your choice as the poet, but directly following the preceding line, the question is a little confusing insofar as train of thought is concerned. Overall it's a good poem. Cheers! |
| ilovetheopera 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseM a bit confusing but that just adds to the very open-ended feel of the poem. Surprisingly, I like it. Repetition of "the mages has disappeared" bit wasn't very evident though, for some reason. I suspect it is simply my overtired brain ignoring lots of things. Also to me it seems the fairy part, "i believed in fairies" somehow doesn't relate to the majority of the poem. |