Hi there..

Nice ending.. realistic..
The tone is good too..
Even if it's short..
It hits really good..

I like it.. =3

- Jammy P.

wow...that's eye opening...I never expected the ending, but I mean that in a good way. I can understand that totally. Well done.

I usually applaude an author for the choppy style of your piece, but this I cannot condone. Whilst your rhyming does not faulter, your subject matter is not flattered by the way you presented it.
Forgive me if this sounds like a flame, it is not intended to be so. I do admire your rhyming.
-J.A.

Very nicely written. I like it. Keep it up!

Okay, my heart's in my throat. That was so sad and real and just...just...damn. Got a little misty there...

o, nice =D i like the rhyming of the two words (crap, i can't remember the actual words for them...ya know, the '-ing' words...). i think it adds to the flow of the poem. great job! keep it up! ^_^

~Winter~

Okay, woah...you're a meanie, lmao.

Okay, so, new Penname? I had no idea. Lovely story, very mean, good emotion!

oh wow harsh ending!
the rest is really relatable though
every one of us has had someone refuse help when they needed it the most
sad really
well done!