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| quarantinedheart 2008-03-05 ch 1,  | abusewow...that's eye opening...I never expected the ending, but I mean that in a good way. I can understand that totally. Well done. |
| 123454321 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abuseI usually applaude an author for the choppy style of your piece, but this I cannot condone. Whilst your rhyming does not faulter, your subject matter is not flattered by the way you presented it. Forgive me if this sounds like a flame, it is not intended to be so. I do admire your rhyming. -J.A. |
| Billie.Joelle 2008-02-26 ch 1, | abuseVery nicely written. I like it. Keep it up! |
| iloveanimecartoons 2008-02-26 ch 1, | abuseOkay, my heart's in my throat. That was so sad and real and just...just...damn. Got a little misty there... |
| WinterDeity 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseo, nice =D i like the rhyming of the two words (crap, i can't remember the actual words for them...ya know, the '-ing' words...). i think it adds to the flow of the poem. great job! keep it up! ^_^ ~Winter~ |
| The Intelligent Designer 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseOkay, woah...you're a meanie, lmao. Okay, so, new Penname? I had no idea. Lovely story, very mean, good emotion! |
| daretobe-dIfFeRnT 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseoh wow harsh ending! the rest is really relatable though every one of us has had someone refuse help when they needed it the most sad really well done! |