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| Black and White Dreams 2008-02-25 ch 1,  | abusethis one reminds me of all of my (failed) relationships. i like this =] ~Black and White Dreams~ |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI think this is a nice poem :) and once again, i love how you make the last part stand out, so i'd definitely have to say the last stanza is my favorite. the only little bit of advice i have is to put the line "what is the problem" with the next stanza, "you said how it used to be was better/it wasn't complicated." it would be nice for the line "i want to be with you" to stand out even more than it already does on its own. great job overall --SB, review marathon |
| Deets 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseI like this poem, it's definitely something I can relate to. The only change I would suggest is in the first stanza to have it say "Tell me why our love can't be / Anything but a heartache." But that could just be a cup half empty/half full kind of thing. |