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| Tytherpol 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abusehaha i don't really like much prose but i love it if it's interesting and done well. i really like how everything played into this. your sentences are a little flat to me..just all v forward and almost unemotional but as a whole i think it's a beautiful piece definitely something to feel good about writing! |
| ihrtbks 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseAw... That was really cute, especially the last sentence! It's really sweet how he attempts to explain his attraction through science but ends up deciding it takes the magic out. I really like this, though it's hard to figure out why... Just one of those "I DO" things... KEEP IT UP. |
| I Quoth Nevermore 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseBrilliant. I love all the science in it, even if I don't really like the subject. Haha. Write more like this, yeah? |
| quiet-zone 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abusePretty cool, but I found more bio references then chemistry ones. A nod to valance electrons would have been nice too :-) |
| Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abusescience is pretty cool. V. Touching |
| Iris Early 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseoh, that's just *beautiful*. honestly, i have no words. 'he is cinematic'. just, oh. wow. |