hm. with such a title I expect a little more.

__Emotion and he parted ways long ago

you mean him right?

__and his ashen heart belongs to reason

I think I wrote somethin about an ashy heart once before, good metaphor though...

I don't know what C.S. Lewis reference you got this from, but I would enjoy reading it. however I'm not sure I see the entire picture.

__A dispassionate

duplicitous

deceiver


good use of alliteration, I like that, schooled me too with duplicitous. cheers to that!

__And the choking death

of silence


hmm, not sure if I like the ending, it's good but with the title standing like so, I think you may need to offer something more powerful, this seems cliche, though it's cliche to say so. anyways good luck, keep it up.