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| 123454321 2008-03-09 ch 1,  | abuse'Torment of winter'-- I don't think using the word 'winter' actually in the poem is a good idea. It elludes to redundency. I like the second stanza more than the first; it seems to flow better. -J.A. Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile). |
| VegasGoddess 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI sympathize with you, I truly truly do. And props to you for finally standing up and saying something about how freakin cold it gets!! lol This was great. Cute, and to the point. My favorite was the end, with... Even Mother Nature Shakes with cold! I thought that was very good. ♥~Grissom's Sweetheart~♥ |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseI love acrostic poems... and this one is very relateable.. I also love the last two lines those were especially great The T line though.. I dunno using the word winter seemed odd.. maybe tormenting the world? or travelers? I dunno just a thought Still a relaly cute and enjoyable piece |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseNice job. It's hard to write acrostic poems. Love the last 2 lines! =) --Katrina Zeffirelli |
| daretobe-dIfFeRnT 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseCOOL! ahh i love this, i've never seen a poem like this beforeXD well done, its really good! |