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| Aomera 2008-04-17 ch 1,  | abusethe repitition works really well. at first i wasnt sure about the long lines but i think they work now. its an original style, this poem and refreshing to read, like lemon peels (well not readng them). well done :) |
| Life In Heaven 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI thought that was actually quite interesting. :L Not something I find with a lot of poetry. I liked the Lemon Peels theme, and how it was a slightly cryptic piece of writing, I could sense what you were talking about, but I didn't really grasp all of it, making it really intriging and thought provoking. I think you should write more poems. :D Well done. =) |
| losing gracie girl 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abusethis is REALLY good. i like the line(s) "burly balls of scent, swelling crawls of bent, bent, and ever bending knowings, knowings. Lemon peels, on a hot noon--she hates that her less lucid thoughts have sweated to the surface. I watch her drink." yours until the wind changes, Lost |
| Writer in the Earth 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseWow this is an old one indeed lol not much like your other works :) you mentioned that though! I still like it--stop throwing the hate on this poem, just leave it, shows your growth :) Funny how she thought you had a thing for her--but your not into "blond things"--things with legs, maybe ;)-- |