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Mercyette 2008-05-24 ch 2,	abuseReview for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in lookup) You seemed to have improved your writing ability in this chapter. Either that, or you worked really hard. Either one is good, right? Anyway, you have much more detail now, which is very pleasing to the reader- which is me! Great Job! I think you could use a little bit less dialoge and still have your chapter be nice. It seemed like every other sentence was someone talking. But that's just a suggestion. Post soon!
Mercyette 2008-05-24 ch 1,	abuseReview for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in lookup) Wow, you definitely have the high school/middle school drama between girls perfectly written. It sad when the same thing used to happen at my school! Anyway, I liked how you put her inner thoughts in italics. I think you. That makes it much easier on the reader! I think your story would be much more powerful if you included some details about the girls. How preppy they dress, how they wear their hair, ect. That way the reader could get a better view of your characters. Overall, great job!
Hope Lopart 2008-03-12 ch 1,	abusegood job...cant wait to read more ~Hope
Msticia 2008-02-29 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis story sounds like it will be interesting to read. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more.
Riley Hunter 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abusei likey! update soon
Mimi Marciano 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good! I love it!
Zephyr Zucchini 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abusebravo