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StrandedOnYou 2009-05-28 . chapter 1
i like this version a lot better :)

its defintly a lot more...idk
but its good


so please like this version
and update :)
sappyromancelvr 2009-05-25 . chapter 1
um wow?
:)
sappyromancelvr 2009-04-18 . chapter 3
Like the last chapter. Especially the last line :)
Chlo-Bo The Klutz 2009-04-14 . chapter 3
I really like the new summary! Can't wait to see how it goes for Chelsey!
Author Of My Life 2009-04-13 . chapter 2
Wow I was just going through some of the stuff on the 'just in' page and this jumped out of me.
This is great keep writing!
Chlo-Bo The Klutz 2009-03-21 . chapter 2
I wonder why people think this story is like Gossip Girl, when it isn't? Sure, might have similars, but it also got differences! So anyway back to subject...I'm liking this story so far girl! The main character got some spunk inside of her for dumping that cappucino to that mean girl. I also like how you made the main character talking about her on the website. It can be like a hint on other people that she is also a victim when even though she is doing the whole "scandalicious" gossip. I rooting for you Veronica! Oh and by the way...Gossip Girl is my favorite show also! :)
Evie Storms 2009-03-06 . chapter 2
It was pretty good.
Watermark 2009-02-19 . chapter 2
Your story resembles Gossip Girl so much...which is a bad thing because you want your story to be original, right? :) As of now...I can't really place my finger on your plot...aside from the cliched high school drama with a mixture of Gossip Girl? I highly suggest you to redo the story over from square one.
Steph Luikens 2009-02-17 . chapter 2
wow! that was like gossip girl, but better, and kinda more realistic.
the scandalicious girl name is a little wierd, but somewhat creative.
i love the inner battle chelsea had with herself. it was very well thought out.
i cant wait to read the updated chapter one! keep up the good work!
harlot 2009-02-13 . chapter 1
so basically you've ripped off gossip girl.
and not even well.
scandalicious isn't a word and the whole appeal of gossip girl is that it's simple and to the point. also, alliteration makes it memorable.
i highly doubt that any girl would dump her coffee on some random ** head and not have her eyes scratched out.

on the plus side, good use of italics to show her thoughts, and basic logical reasoning. a little inner dialogue always makes things interesting. that's about it though.
StrandedOnYou 2009-02-12 . chapter 2
this is a really good story and i really cant wait for you to update

this is so like high school
haha

keep it up
Riley Hunter 2009-02-12 . chapter 2
VERONICA! You never update! Aw. you finally did! Me and Bina's little baby writer is finally growing up...wait a sec...this means I have to update *muses* well, i'm off to work on mine

update soon baby girl
XPaperGangstaChick 2009-02-12 . chapter 2
It almost reminds me of Gossip Girl--only its not...
I love it so far. Keep it up.
seeking stardom 2009-02-02 . chapter 2
Loving it! PLEASE update soon! I'm in love :D

Love,

~Ali
Mercyette 2008-05-24 . chapter 2
Review for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in lookup)

You seemed to have improved your writing ability in this chapter. Either that, or you worked really hard. Either one is good, right? Anyway, you have much more detail now, which is very pleasing to the reader- which is me! Great Job!

I think you could use a little bit less dialoge and still have your chapter be nice. It seemed like every other sentence was someone talking. But that's just a suggestion.

Post soon!
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