Reviews for Returning the Favor

Reviews For: Returning the Favor

DorkMaster 2008-02-25 ch 1,	abuseLet me start by saying this poem was very good. I loved the rhyme and it flowed well. The use of italics interests me. It's funny you should mention it in your note. I couldn't really figure out the point, though, sorry. So to me the whole thing was your life was screwed over by someone else. But I know that doesn't capture it. I know that the other person was probably depressed, possibly taking drugs for that... and then... grr. I don't know. But I want to. So I'll be thinking about this. Thank you for your review. -Trisha
Sarah Allie 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseLol, what're the italics for? You got me curious... are they to talk about how the girl helped him out in his time of need, or something? The rhyming in the last stanza seems a bit awkward (but again, that's probably just me, you don't have to listen if you don't want to). Anyway, I enjoyed reading this, and think you're an AMAZING poet :)! Sarah :) x the Review Game
simpleplan13 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abuseI have no idea what the italics are, but you made me curios.. lol I like the piece a lot.. it's powerful and it flows really well... and the rhyming is great.. well done and not blatantly obvious... The transition was a bit odd though... when you described him asleep and not angry you seemed happy, but then you go to not being happy and wanting revenge... the first time I read it I was confused... when I reread it I got that the favor you were returning was anger, but referring back 4 lines might be a bit confusing... Anyhow the piece is really well written and I find the italicizing interesting even if I dont know what it means... let me know? PS if you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon there's a link in my profily
Esther Jade 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abuseReview game! There seems to be an interesting concept at the centre of this work but I will quite candidly admit that I don't get it. Possibly reading more of your poetry would help as one often needs to tune into a poet. Two things I would work on: 1) Punctuation. It's a bit inconsistent and there are lines where there should be punctuation and isn't. A lot of people forget the importance of punctuation in poetry but it is crucial. Remember that poetry is meant to be said out loud and misleading punctuation can mar the way someone will read your work. 2) Rhyme. While rhyme can be a very helpful technique to use in poetry, it is important to always know why you want to use a specific rhyming scheme. In some places, your choice of rhyme aids the flow of the poem (e.g. your third stanza). In others, it feels awkward and forced (e.g. first and last stanza). Remember, you are in control not the rhyme - you need to be free the most expressive and effective way to communicate your ideas and feelings.
fleur de l'est 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abuseI thought everything was going to be sweet and peaceful at first, and I even thought it was going to be about love!! Confused by the 4th stanza, and then everything made sense again =) You're great at building up tension and suspense! Well done
Smar 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abuseI'm not too into guessing the meanings of poems. But I will say that I liked the rhythm and meter here.

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