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| Life In Heaven 2008-03-15 ch 1,  | abuseFirst off, I loved the variety of font styles. The italics/bold were effective for making certain words & feelings stand out. I thought it could have been more raw, but some of the description was beautiful: "This monster inside of me, starves for your love, your devotion". That image is one of the most personally relevant verses I have ever came across, and in a simple way, that line, and this whole piece, was really quite touching. Keep writing, and maybe review some of my work [Poetry:Romance/angst] if you get bored kthx. =] |
| Written 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abusewow, very angsty. it's really almost passive aggressive in nature- cool stuff. just a heads up, you spelled gladly wrong in your summary. |