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Reviews For: Odd Lucy

KnittingKneedle 2008-04-22 ch 1,	abuseHi, a return review from me :) There was a great deal of simplicity in this piece which I enjoyed and the last line was just heart-breaking... I think some more examples of how Lucy was odd, the way she protected Alex etc would be effective, but apart from that I liked the brevity of it- a lot like Lucy's life I think :) “Are you going to be alright?” Lucy shrugged. The way this was organised, I thought it was Lucy talking, though it turned out it wasn't, perhaps a change in structure would make this a little clearer.
quiet-zone 2008-02-26 ch 1,	abuseThis is actually one of the best short stories I've read on this site. I like the length as it is, but if you continue it I'd be happy also. I really like the relationship between the two characters, and I think you did an awesome job.
WynnFire 2008-02-25 ch 1,	abuseNot bad, a bit short though. I liked how you managed to develop your characters in just a short space of time, however. Good job! Smiles ~WynnFire~
groovacious 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseAww I love the ending. Just crisp. Good story.
Detox 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseI wish there was more to this story, I'm doing something called the Review Marathon (link in my profile) right now and I read this mainly because the summary intrigued me. The writing in this is very simple but it does get the point across. I guess it's simple but complex depending on the meaning behind it (or what I thought was the meaning)...The only thing I have to say "bad" about this is the second mentioning of the size of Lucy’s clothes, it has already been established that they were too big for her. I'm pretty sure what was up with Lucy but yeah other than that I'd try to finish this if I were you.

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