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| Fractured Illusion 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuse" AKA hell on wheels" *laughs* That's a funny way of putting it! "but I am 99 sure" 99 percent? Anyhow, it was a really charming read, but I cannot help but feel that it grew a bit bland. The start was awesome. But middle to end was weaker. This definitely have potential, though, so keep it up! - Frac, from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
| tibetan-knight 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseReview Marathon! (link in my profile) I absolutely love this. I find it so hilarious that Lindsay is aware that her life is like a soap opera, but she's all like "None of this is my fault!" And I like how you pull the soap opera elements out and made it part of her life, but still developed it into something interesting. Just a few technical errors. "...and when Eli I looked into Eli’s dark hazel eyes as I said my vows..." That's probably not what you meant to write. But no biggie ^.^ --Rachel |
| SickButPretty 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. It's lively, has got a real bite to it. I shall follow it in the future providing I'm not swamped with school. Ps is Zeke supposed to be a teenager? Just wondering. |