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| doctor's diagnosis 2008-02-23 ch 1,  | abuseFirst impression: Whoa, I love all the references from the bible. Seriously, they're amazing. Form: Good grammar and capitalization, but come on, punctuate! It lets the reader know when to breathe. And helps the overall flow. Final word: I like this, a lot. With punctuation, it would be simply superb. :) Cheers, Rachel |