Reviews for Black and White, Black and White

Reviews For: Black and White, Black and White

Minamahal 2008-07-25 ch 1,	abuse"(Static picture of "perfection?")" was perhaps my favourite line. While the repeats could have been a little tiring, I also feel that it adds emphasis to the whole poem. The last stanza was also amazingly done. "But you leave the happiness behind, too" really spoke of the difference between black and white to its opposite of colour. Once again, outstanding job. ;*
the Stranger in the moonlig... 2008-07-05 ch 1,	abuseHmm... very nice. I liked the almost pleading for your own sake and everyone else's. ~the Stranger in the moonlight
effervescent-sentiments 2008-02-26 ch 1,	abuseFirst stanza: What does "static" picture mean? Also, and this is just a little technical thing, but I'd close the quotations before the question mark on "perfection." I think that can go either way, but it looks better, to me, this way. Like the second and third stanza, though I don't really care for the repeated first line. Bit... done, isn't it? Same with the last line. Though, once again, that's preference. Sorry, I just always like to leave an author with critique, since there's so much blind praise/flaming on fictionpress. Good poem. :)
simpleplan13 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseI love how you put the last line parenthesis... that was really great and they're also really powerful lines... I also just like the whole idea of the piece.. the contrast between black and white and color... I did find it a bit repetitive though... I'm not sure how to fix that since it is sorta part of the format, but I dunno I might work on that a bit Anyhow a really great piece and I'm happy that you're posting again! PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon... there's a link in my profile

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