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| simpleplan13 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseI love your descriptions of Hollywood and the repetition of that stanza that changes at the end... and the ending is also really wonderful Give you're speech... your Hold you're breath... your I'm not a big fan of the second line of the repeating stanza I'm not sure why.. maybe because it's such a different meaning then the last one.. or maybe because it doesn't sound as powerful.. it's kinda like well you didnt hafta leave.. instead of I didnt want you to leave... i dunno just me rambling Anyhow really great little piece.. I like it a lot PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon.. there's a link in my profile (I may have already said that... in another review.. im not sure..) |