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ImagineMe 2008-03-29 ch 2,	abuseLOVE IT I can't wait for Chapter 3. it's kinda funny that some guy named Marcus just claimed her as his daughter, anyways like someone said in another review you should space out your story so it won't be so hard to read it and it will make you chapters look longer.^^
Ice and Snow 2008-02-27 ch 2,	abuseYou should work more on background information so you'll be able to draw more readers. Try to space out the paragraphs so even if there's really little words in a chapter, it'll look longer. Plus, it'll be easier for us to read. Also, try to write more for a certain chapter. No one likes a cliffie and you can ramble on and on about something. You don't always have to go straight to the point. And if you're unable to think of anything, it's okay to merge a few chapters. Wait a while to upload a chapter. It's alright to make people wait as long as the chapter's good. So yup. That's my input. You have a lovely beginning to what I hope will be a wonderful story! Ciao!
ImagineMe 2008-02-24 ch 1,	abuseGood job :) the story is really good so far. it is very imaginative, there must be some crazy ideas going on in your head like me LOL. please update soon :)