Reviews for my sad sorry selfish cry out to the cutter

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Crimson Vampire Werewolf 2008-06-28 ch 9,	abusegreat chapter!
AuthoressCharlie 2008-06-27 ch 9,	abuseOH NOES! You used up all the disk space!? I wanna new chapter. Hmm... I need a haircut but I'm gonna donate it so it will have to be longer. A LEMON lollipop? Yes I do suffer from an overly perverted mind. ~Charlie ^_^
Confetti Kitty 2008-06-24 ch 9,	abuseI'm getting a haircut too :D anyhow, I probably should talk about the story. Huh huh Me likey.
Quinty 2008-06-24 ch 9,	abuseWOO! UPDATE! There were a few typos I've spotted. “I hoe you don’t have scabies or syphilis.” He teased." I know you meant "hope" xD And the sentence should end in a comma. You might just want to read it over again and edit them out. There wasn't much though! I'm so glad you didn't make them go all the way yet. That would have been too soon! And it's already four more days until they leave the camp? But they just got there! I would have liked to see what it was like for them to be at the camp. Derrick said he hated everyone else there, it would have been nice to see some interractions with the other people there. Just to see WHY exactly he hates them. But he seems like the type that would be easily annoyed xD Can't wait to read more!
Confetti Kitty 2008-06-11 ch 8,	abuseTHANKS A LOT YOU BIG MEAN PERSON THING! Update SOON please! I'm not going to get out of my chair until you update! Oh, and thanks for remembering my birthday. It's not today, or this month or anthing, but you still rememberd. Now update.
Fictatiousrambler 2008-04-18 ch 8,	abuseAh! God, why did you have to stop there, that is so mean! -pouts sadly- you're just playing with me. I was getting so into that chapter and then it ended. Gosh, it's like reading the two part chapter in my story. Please update soon!
Crimson Vampire Werewolf 2008-04-18 ch 8,	abuseomg this is so awesome badass story...i will b back...lol
josh-u-rawr 2008-04-17 ch 8,	abuseAnother great chapter. Kind of sad tho =( I feel sorry for Joseph =( Plz update soon!
Quinty 2008-04-17 ch 8,	abuseIs Derrick turning psycho?! Joseph just told him something big, and now he's practically RAPING him! But then, Joseph isn't really fighting back. So yeah... that's pretty much one of the evilest cliff hangers I've ever read. I still feel like things are moving a bit fast between these two lovely boys. I don't think someone would be willing to share something like... sleeping with their step brother (or, being raped basically) to someone they haven't known long. It seems like if that's why he was sent to the camp, he'd be sensitive when the question comes up. Maybe say something like, "I'd rather not talk about it..." or something like that. Really, it's just what I've said before. Take the time for their relationship to build. But good job for making it longer!! throws confetti Update soon!
aesthetic.rainbows 2008-04-07 ch 7,	abuselol. hey jenny baby
Fictatiousrambler 2008-04-06 ch 7,	abuseHey, aw that was so cute. A lovers spat! A deal is a deal, your next chapter is practically posted. ^-^
Crimson Vampire Werewolf 2008-04-06 ch 7,	abuseMan you ** have to countinue i actually love this stroy
Ashrav 2008-04-06 ch 7,	abuseAW poor Derry! -sniffles- please update soon xD
josh-u-rawr 2008-04-04 ch 7,	abuseAnother great chapter! Keep them coming! I wanna see how this relationship develops more...its exciting!
Quinty 2008-04-04 ch 7,	abuseYAY! Wait, not yay! They just had an argument! There was something I was confused about though! I thought his name was Derrick, but then it said Daniel, but then Chelsey calls him Derry! And that's short for Derrick, right?! And also you put 1:09 p.m. which would be the afternoon, not late at night. But that's just a little typo and can easily be fixed! So while I absolutely adore this story, I guess it's time for a little constructive criticism. I think Daniel (I'm just going to go with that one since it's used in the chapter xD) overreacted about the whole thing. It didn't seem like a realistic thing a boy in real life would do, since, you know, they just met and all. There's plenty of time to get to know each other and develope feelings. I can see where it would be weird to have a boy suddenly kiss you though. But his actions would have been more believable if they knew each other longer. And I'm still not sure how old they are, or if you mentioned that I probably forgot already xD But if they are underage they wouldn't be able to get into a bar and get drunk. But then if they weren't underage, their parents wouldn't be able to MAKE them go to a bible camp. If I was twenty-one and my mom was trying to make me go to some bible camp I'd be like hells no! By the way the characters are written it seems like they're in their teens. Anyway, I would have expected Daniel to pretend not to care. You know how boys are, they never like to show what they're really feeling. While maybe he has a "whatever" attitude about it, what he's really feeling is disappointment or confusion? But he just dismisses it and never speaks of the kiss again until it gets to the other boy. Doesn't that sound interesting?! WOO! xD And maybe just another suggestion. If there's a scene change, make a dividing line so readers don't get confused. Dividing lines are lovely :) I love this story and I hope you do update tomorrow because I would like some more, please?

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