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| iLone 2008-02-25 ch 1,  | abuseThis was really moving. That's all I can say. |
| TheMagicPen 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseDamn. Powerful...you really got a gift girly. |
| anxiouslyD 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseFrom the very beginning I had this feeling of trepidation as I read this. Why? Because I had my suspicions from your unrealistic, naive words and after I finished reading they were only enforced. What I'm trying to say is: This felt like it was written by a child born into their religion who has never experienced sex and wrote this story with the only intention being to frighten other teens into abstaining from sex or accepting God. I hope you don't misinterpret this review as some sort of flame because it is just honesty. I can only wish you would have chosen to write about something with even an ounce of honesty in it. If this was a truthful story, than it should help you to know that you couldn't pay a reader to believe a word of it. The best advice for any writer is write what you know. That's all I'll say. |
| Katie Saychiadu 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseThis story is slightly distrubing... |