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| Youkai Author 2008-02-26 ch 1,  | abuseI enjoyed reading this. I feel like these were real people. You did a great job with their personalities, even though it's just a short little passage. Also, I like the fluidity. It doesn't jump around randomly, and that's always a good thing for serious stories. Just, change the summary. I almost didn't read it, because saying that you wrote it in history class makes it seem like you're not a serious writer. Okay, maybe you're not. I don't know the situation. Anyway, that's all I have to say. |