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| The Reverse Edge Blade 2008-02-27 ch 1,  | abuseI liked how you described the emotions of the I-person in the story, and how you wrote the class travel incident. I liked how you wrote her parents' attitudes, and her life before they separated. Also, how you wrote about her friend betraying her like that was good. The only thing I wished for, was for you to put in some positive and uplifting stuff at least at the end of the story, because as it is now, even though it is really well-written, it's still just a story about a person who lives a hell, without seeing a purpose in it, or anything that can cheer her up. I hope you'll continue this story! I'll keep a look-out! The Reverse Edge Blade |