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| Tragically Charismatic 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseScary. Tres good! But scary.. xoxo |
| Detox 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseI like how this is laid out. The inclusion of "forever" every fourth line adds a lot to it, at first I figured this was kind of like a list but that really changed it. My favorite one would probably have to be "forever on the wall". I'm not sure if I like the final set you have at the end, but it does conclude it at a somewhat powerful point. Good job. -Detox, contestant in the Review Marathon (link in my profile) |