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| breathless74 2008-07-29 ch 3,  | abuseI really like this beginning! It seems a lot like Jumper, so I'm interested to see where you'll take this. :D |
| Amarantha Raine 2008-06-16 ch 3, | abuseYet another good story from you! :D Even my little sister enjoyed it (she only read the prologue tho) This story seems really interesting. Cecilia's reaction to seeing a random guy in her bathroom was a bit strange and unrealistic...but I guess that's just her character. Keep writing! :D Found a few typos...here's one: “If **you want you want** your hairdryer back, I suggest you be nice to me.” |
| Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-03-03 ch 3, | abuseLol, CC and reviews are awesome- after all 'wide eyes' writer's have fires, which review fuel and thus if no reviews, no writer and no writing!! Forgive my metaphor :) i joined you for the chapter :D looking forward to the next one! I found it confusing the way you( u did want CC right?) went from Cecilia to kristen and then cecilia and kristen again. It was just a tad confusing, but i slowly got my heard around it. ( well not slowly, just less quickly than normal) keep writing this! :) |
| frozen.bear 2008-03-03 ch 3, | abuseOk, when I read that Kristian went missing and suddenly came back, I thought 'He joined the mafia!' (I just finished reading JAG so that must be why). But then the 'teleported' thing happened! It made this story even more intriguing and Cecilia is hilarious. Though how can she not recognized him? Update! |
| Kationo4ka 2008-03-03 ch 3, | abuseWell, I guess you are pretty much holding the next chapter of the story hostage - and need reviews in return, so I gave in and desided to write one. Although I can't say much more than: I love this story, sure it may 3 chapters in, but it has intrigued me far more than Lord of the Rings did at this very point, and I happen to love that book ;). I really like the selection of the names, by the way, but thats for my own little reasons, hint hint. Keep writing, and I'll keep reviewing ^^ |
| Tecna 2008-03-03 ch 3, | abuseI'm hoping for another really quick update, this story gets fascinating by every chapter. Iloved this chapter,it's amazing. I really can't wait to see her reaction to his answer but also when she finds out who he really is. Update and fast. Tecna ;) |
| ladalada 2008-03-02 ch 3, | abuseWah. I loved this chapter. Though this is a little slow. Well anyway, update soon! |
| a 2008-03-02 ch 3, anon. | abuseYou caught me. I am guilty. I added, but didn't review. =). But I'm glad that you're updating. This chapter was cute. Did you by any chance get this idea from Jumper? |
| KelseyBell910 2008-03-02 ch 3, | abusegood, kinda confusing at first. but it was good. |
| kazahana 2008-03-01 ch 2, | abuseLooking good so far though it's short. I do love long chapters :p I'll wait patiently for the next chapter! |
| KelseyBell910 2008-02-26 ch 2, | abuseit looks good. =] continue soon. |
| Tecna 2008-02-26 ch 2, | abuseGreat detail in this chapter, really makes you wonder what actually happend. There's suspense and a thriller, I can't wait to read more. Do update! Tecna ;) |
| I Quoth Nevermore 2008-02-26 ch 2, | abuseThis chapter wasn't tedious. It gave important background information that will probably be the basis of the story. Am I right? Anyways, I like your writing style. Pretty darn sweet. I hope you update soon! |
| Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-02-26 ch 2, | abusepretty cool, i like it! :) |
| XxAmberRomancexX 2008-02-25 ch 2, | abuseOh woah...for a minute there I thought she was actually in the hospital. Nice chapter, althought nothing much really happened. I will try to be patient though! |