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| The Sun and Shadow 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseSuch an interesting story, uniquely told. The writing itself is a little rough, but I really like the tale. I guess if I had to be honest I'm a bit into the darker side of things. Good thread! ~Sun |
| Steve Sweeney 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseReally excellent :) |
| artificial destiny 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abusei liked the idea/plot. one thing about it that could be improved is the way you develop it? like, build the story up so the ending is that much more sad/sorrowful. or perhaps, tie the narrator to the story/why shes telling the story well, i hope this review helps :) pls r/r back! -artificial destiny |