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| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseThis poem was pretty interesting, i really like the way its written! Ill have you know im very slow in getting things like this, so i read it over and i think i got it... There's really nothing i would change its fine as is --SB, review marathon |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseOoh much enjoyed. To be honest, I'm not quite sure what you were trying to get at, but the imagery was brilliant. My only comment was that the word "splattered" didn't seem to fit in with the rest, otherwise... really good =) Keep it up! Moon's Poetess P.S. I'm with the review marathon, check it out on my site! |
| hazyglow 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseI most definitely liked it. I liked how you have the rhyming of 'sand' and 'land' ... and then the next line it's "Then, suddenly, they froze" .. so not only are the 'ribbons' frozen but also the rhyming. Wicked job though :) |