This is pretty interesting I'm not really sure what could be fatal about the symptoms she gave, unless the doctor was being sarcastic. But anyway did you write this with the words red actually colored in red? Is that why they're in bold? I'd suggest you unbold that because as I was reading I found myself skipping across the page to each one without reading much. So I had to go back. It would get the point across just the same but not so much in your face. But besides that I only caught one typo "things" you put "thing". This kind of ends abruptly too.

-Detox (participant of the Review Marathon, more info about it is in my profile if you're interested)