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| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseThis is pretty good, i like the way it flows. in the first two lines, though, the rhyme seems a bit forced. and on the fourth to last line i think it should be "one" instead of "on". again, nice job though. --SB, review marathon |