 smile for the sunshine 2008-02-24 . chapter 1lovely poem but a few grammatical errors: it's should be its and tick tocking should be hyphenated. other than that i thought it was beautiful. it was a sophiscated way of portraying weakness in love. words like "epitome" and "epiphany" help to give it that appearance. word choice: wonderful. story: beautiful. poem: well written.
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