I love everything about this story! You're doing a phenomenal job, and I really can't wait for more :)

~Carm~

*brain straining* what's going on? oh...don't tell me this is a good mystery...i just hope you update soon...

okay lee=total loser but what the heck is an apocolyptic? and why is everyone so cool about this? and who/what is blaire? hm intriguing. wait! i'm running out of things to read! on to the next chapter...

hm is it a sin to fight in a church and freak out then laugh at a preast? definitely not one of the deadly ones so i think she's PRETTY safe... i don't know who this voice in her head is but i like him (or her) lol at that conversation. on to the next chapter...(yes i know this sort of sign off is getting old)

hm i don't think my opinion really matters since it's already been written though any of them would be equally intriguing.

i agree "who the hell is this guy?". i

okay first he says he's dreaming but now he says he knew he was going to wake her up...where is she? did he did up her body? why did his mom drive him to this place? why isn't she more freaked out? btw, is she just remembering about her life?? or has she already remembered everything. are these memories still coming to her in flashes, or waves or is that over and done with and all her memories are back? she made a comment about zane's mother, which means she must remember him. maybe you can make it sound like she remembered it in bits and pieces. could at some length. i'm sorry. i'm kind of an editing nerd. let me know if i'm annoying with these coments. i'm still intrigued by this story...on to the next chapter (yes, i know i'm lame)

Okay, time for another review, i guess i must be getting annoying. but this time i actually have something to say! when you said "one of us sleeping at a time" i think you meant one of us awake at all times. am i right? and, just a suggestion, i hope you would add a little more about the characters action, to break up the dialogue. You know, tell us what the narrator is thinking, the look in the guys eyes as he relates the stories, his gestures, so on and so forth. tell me if i'm totally off base here or whatever. otherwise, this story is coming off great. on to the next chapter...

Even though the next chapter is already up, i'll review it anyway if you don't mind. So, he seems kind of unfreaked out. even if it was just a dream i would freak out, maybe that's just me. obviously he's not feeling too guilty about the fact that she's dead or, even in a dream, he would've been reluctant to talk about what happened. must know what's going on...on to the next chapter.

Nice beginning. i'm already trying to get a sense of what's happening. sense of smell that portrays emotion? what happened to her. that guy, what did he do to her or what was his connection? i must know!! on to the next chapter! good work :)

Lovely. This was an amazing chapter.

Hope to read more soon :)

~Carm~

YAY! Love iT! Zanes just so Aw but like angsty and woah and then HER NAMES WILLOW! And Gavins like a stalker and I need to shut up and Aarons cool so far and YAY! TWO CHAPTERS IN A DAY!
And Writer's block Snapple Apple!
I know your pain/frustration.
It's very painful/frustrating.

Absolutely wonderful. I love every bit of this story :)

Keep up the fantastic work!

~Carm~

Oh deary me... what on earth are they gonna tell aaron?
oh gosh... this is bad
And what's with the voice?
MORE and MORE QUESTIONS!
Gah!
And oh my god I can't seem to write my own next chapter
(don't you just hate linking up plot pieces?)
But anywho: UPDATE!
:D
twas great btw

Right, right. I never answered your question.

I'd go with "C." You obviously want to tell Zane's story, but plot dumps are annoying.

Hope that helps!