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| HelpWanted11 2008-02-29 ch 1,  | abuseI love the use of alliteration at the beginning. This piece is intriguing and I really like it. Anyway, awesome piece. Keep writing, HelpWanted11 |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseI like the alliteration in some of the lines and the ending a lot... especially the last line was really nice the line about the roof seemed a bit long for the format though... still an awesome job |
| Cazrolime 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. :D You've managed to write a poem with an uncertain rhythm that nonetheless does not jar. (Feel my envy. :P) I can see it being the lyrics for a really awesome song. |
| FellowMan 2008-02-25 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this, quite good, a smooth read :)good lilts |