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| Quoven 2008-03-19 ch 6,  | abuseOutside the Realm of Freedom: I liked how you used a small detail of your life in which an unreasonable law stopped you from doing something you felt you should have been able to do, after analyzing the law for its validity. I agree with you that this way of doing things seems to be the current way of things. I would challenge you to look at the Patriot Act (what a laughable, hypocritical title) and its impacts of aspects of our liberty that actually matter. Nice work. |
| Quoven 2008-03-18 ch 2, | abuseI think there are two essays you need to write as foundation chapters in order to make this one's intentions more justified. The first needs to critique the electoral college and point out its inadequacy, since this is, in itself, a much debated political process. The other essay needed writing is a critique of the two party system and its in adequacies. Because, in the end, even you point out that the goal is to get someone in office who is the most widely tolerated of candidates. The two party certainly accomplishes this, and probably a lot better than a multi party system would. One need only look to other countries with a multi-party system and see that this system is likely to elect someone with far less than fifty percent of the vote. Maybe you need to point out more about how you see other parties being incorporated into government? Just some thoughts. |
| Weise17 2008-02-25 ch 1, | abuseHey, just let you know I edited and expanded on my essay, thanks for your suggestions, I hope it now meets your approval. cheers! |