again nice chapter. I love your voice and diction, even with the grammar errors and stuff. your plot line is pretty interesting so far too. Please update again soon. I hate cliffhangers

I like a lot ;]]

drink bloods eh? another story bout vampires i see. i'm really getin tired of the TWILIGHT's series and i think your story will do much more interesting. but david mace is just like another version of edward cullen, right? handsome, smart and all? L.O.L.

whoa this looks like this is getting interesting cant wait to read more :D

wow. I know its been a while since you updared but please please update soon. its really good

really good story so far. hhah wow im sorry but who goes to sleep with a stranger in the house? i mean id like stay awake and watch him. god knows what has has on him. but yess w/e. i really like this story so far. update soon!

I'm adding you to my alert bc I think this has lots of potential and I LOVE the way it started.

There are several errors here. You said "your" instead of "you're" and "were" instead of "where" (a lot of times)and "memorize" instead of "mesmorize." Oh, and "Angle" instead of "Angel" and "clam" instead of "calm." Actually, I could go on, but I'll shut up now ^_^ Sorry, it's just that I can easily pick up mistakes (I want to be an editor) and I notice stuff like that. I just read your AN and now I feel like a jerk for pointing these out. But I'm just trying to help. Anyways, if you need a beta, I can help, but if not that's okay. I really like the plot though, interesting. I hope you update soon!

Ooh. I really like this. At first I was a bit iffy, but the end of this chapter was great. It's interesting. Update soon!

I enjoyed reading this chapter and can't wait to see where this story goes.
I liked this part a lot: He stayed like that for a timeless moment.
Consider editing this for grammar/tense errors:
-its hard spin now lying
-It's my duties as a
-He said the own kind like a disease(put 'own kind')
-though what he was wanted him to puck
-The women let her hand (woman)
-It will, be coming
-He composer changed as his
-The women inquired and stared
- a soul once their turned
-whom held a quizzed expression
- I still wonder this till this day
-The women stated
-he quickly did the same as well
-The women looked
-while she cling to
-The women wished she could always
-Their days would be filled with joy and laughter throughout their days
-the hinges as a figure in at the door
-hopping to caught Dane's
-she was being dragged away from mysterious man
-The women's eye widen
-turn once it cried
-had even took her own life
-the wind on instant the
-had been bewitch

amazing beginning. I love your first half about love and relationships. that is really great and so real in our society today. The ending is amazing too. How you go from 'He is my prince' to ...'he also drinks blood' great work. Please update soon. =]