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| miss masquerade 2008-08-25 ch 4,  | abuseThis was a great chapter. There are some grammar and punctuation issues, but there's some good writing. The only problem I see is that are lots of questions and absolutely no answers. You should probably address some questions soon, such as her singing, her chains, Trevor, why she changed, etc. Anyway, great job, keep posting! Soon! |
| BennyBrownBrown 2008-08-13 ch 2, | abuseThis is getting really good! I'm glad I finally have time to read it! Athan and Kendra reunited! Hm, I wonder what happened to Kendras' parents? -BennyBrownbrown I was almost scared when it took a long time for Athan to get Kendra to realize they've met before.I was leaning onto the computor screen! I thought Kendra got amesia or she would have walked out on him! |
| BennyBrownBrown 2008-07-27 ch 1, | abuseWow...this chapter was so interesting to read. The ending where Kendra and Athan sing again together was so cute, lovely, and friendshipy! Man, If i were in Kendra's shoes when Athan yelled at her on the stage I'd be so embarrassed I'd run out crying! Go Kendra, GIRL power! Oh, I really hope nothing really bad happened to Kendra that made her stop singing...she seems such a nice character. But then again, that's what's this story is about, right?!-BennyBrownbrown |
| ~courtney~ 2008-06-10 ch 3, anon. | abuseaww i really like this story! its really cute and its realistic. WHE! this kinda reminds me of "give love a chance" but with younger peoples. |
| miss masquerade 2008-05-29 ch 3, | abuseAnother great chapter! Just wanted to say be careful. If you introduce too many characters at once, it's hard to keep them straight. In this chapter we have Allison, Carolyn, Brittney, Chelsea, Mary, Rosalina, Trevor, and unnamed-stranger-friend-of-Trevor. That's quite a few people for just one chapter. But other than that, great! |
| ~courtney~ 2008-04-20 ch 2, anon. | abuseYAY! THEY'RE GONNA FALL IN LOVE! its like a movie! |
| ~courtney~ 2008-04-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseaw! its gonna be a cute love story |
| miss masquerade 2008-04-19 ch 2, | abuseI liked your flashbacks because they did give some more background information to the story. But I didn't like that they were in bold, in most stories they are in italics so maybe you should stick to that to make it easier. I also didn't like how you did part of the same flashback twice, becuase I mean, I had just read it, why read it again? But otherwise, great job, I really like this chapter. |
| miss masquerade 2008-02-25 ch 1, | abuseThat is really cute. I like the dad's reaction to their friendship. Please update. |