Ok, so I didn't really like the beginning, you seem to be doing more telling than showing. Given that it was a beginning, it's okay but some readers are put off by a lot of "telling" words. BUT, after the initial confusion of the beginning it's brilliant. :3 I like it a lot.

Hm... GG reminds me of Howl (from Howl's Moving Castle.) I love how much attention you put into their names and outfits; in some stories it's a little overbearing, but you somehow fit it right into the story. One thing bugs me a bit, though, from time to time there's a few words here and there that make it seem like it's in third person. It's hard to catch, but it throws the flow off.

WTF.
Why haven't I reviewed to any of these chapters?
And why do I feel like I never finished reading this chapter?
F--I'm so confused.

Anyways.
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So much gay. Hahaha~

I hope GG is okay! I'd be scared to be cornered by those things in the middle of the night. They're freaky! O:

PS: What's a blue? Or do I have to wait to know? Ahahaha...

Y'know what...Chalcedony is a douche. However, that is not the point. The point is, while you're busy working on this wonderful story, you should instead be working on Double Helix. I'm pretty sure it has to be done by May or March.

Woo! I just caught up with the last two chapters. I have to say... I'm intrigued. Can't wait for the next installment!

Write on! :D

You should update right now. This very moment. Now...right now...

Argh! I submitted a review but ... it's gone somewhere. Else. Anyway, I'm really enjoying this! Please post again soon!

I am so enjoying reading this! When reading other peoples stories, I am more often than not left with the impression that good dialogue based writing is hard to find due to the rapid increase in overly pretentious styles but with this the writing seems very natural. I don't mean understated, only that I'm finding the progression of dialogue soothing. Coupled with the intrigue I am REALLY REALLY enjoying this! Please post again soon?

Firstly, I loved the description in you opening paragraph, the way you described the moon was very original and interesting, however the stars seemed a little messy in that paragraph and the term ‘goofing off’ was a colloquialism that didn’t suit the language of the previous descriptions.

The set up of the kingdom with all the masks was something I’ve never come across before and I think you had just the right amount of exposition in this piece, so that we were learning about the kingdom without being really ‘told’ in a massive info dump, which is an achievement

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This story is so much fun to read! Keep writing! :D

Y'know what. You is awesome. Write more and more and more and more. MORE!1

I really like this. You have a very good writing style that I enjoyed very much. Do continue! :D

Interesting concept. I like it. Honestly, I think Theron is my favorite so far.

Write on!