Really well-written. I like reading stories that are based a bit what I'm going through. Some of the paragraphs are my actual reasons why I love the guy I do. Again, very well-written.

Good Jesus, you are a [i]fantastic[/i] writer. (I really hope that HTML just worked because if it didn't I'll feel like a FOOL) Seriously, this is so un-cliche that I was just totally floored. Fantastic. I forgot to mention this on the other thing I reviewed--you do need to have someone somewhat objective go through your stories and proofread them. There were a few miscellaneous (I hate the word "random") missing words here and there. Otherwise, pretty good. ^_^

It's really sweet, i liked it a lot!

This would probably make a good poem if you added line breaks, but I doubt that's what you want it to be.

'You look like a combination of a Hawaiian tourist, and someone from back in the days before they had haircuts and razors.' Love this line.