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| GRAYTEXT 2008-02-27 ch 2,  | abuseI enjoyed this look at Althea and Mike's background. It would be lovely if you could continue this series. |
| GRAYTEXT 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseReally interesting work. The opening paragraph was extremely well written. I loved all the images. One thing about the first section, though. It might be made past tense, just so we know it isn't happening at the same time as the second part. I gathered the first part didn't happen at all? |
| Lozza 2008-02-27 ch 2, anon. | abuseThe second is so cute~ It'd be a really nice kind of prequel to release after a more complete story though. Thoguh that's just torchering you more |
| Lozza 2008-02-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseFlrblegrshhsdfnlisuahdf! I was a bit apprehensive about your mental state after reading the first paragraph (well, long run-on sentence)... But because it seemed a terribly out-of-character thing for you to write, and you'd said it definitely wasn't a wangsty piece of teen dromance, I kept reading. Even though some parts made me wince. Then it became fluffy in the good way. Adorable, funny, heartwarming, all those words the advertising crew use to describe romantic comedies. With added geekery. I like it so far~ |
| Teldumor 2008-02-26 ch 1, | abuseHah, I love your beginning. It's excellent visuals and it made me smile. Good work, It really makes me want to read the rest. |