You just took me back to elamentary school. I like this poem.
Except...I was a bit traumatized by crayons. I would break them, because I am one intense draw-er. Then the teacher would look at me with this 'I-cant-be-mad-at-you-but-youve-GOT-to-stop-breaking-my-crayons' kind of look...

I still break them...

Haha, I liked the colors. I think this is a good piece. Just one thing, though -- in the first stanza you had four colors and then a list of three things. It's just a bit uneven (if you get what I mean), that and the fact that you don't do that in the last stanza when you also have four colors, so it's a bit weird.

But otherwise, I really like this.

crayons are sweet

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I like the rhythm you incorporate into the poem - it creates a nice lilt that complements the theme.

Two small things I would suggest: I find "sharpeners to sharpen" a bit repetitive. And I would put a comma at the end of the second-last line.

Overall, maybe I would suggest linking symbolism to the colours - it could add a deeper meaning to the poem. Just an idea.

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You took something juvenile and made a really good piece at of it...

One thing in the beginning you have 4 colors followed by 3 things...that seemed a bit odd to me but if you make that 3 you prolly should make the last stanza 3 as well

In the second stanza I didn't like the repetition in the last line because the rest of it wasn't repetitive.. it was thing 1 to thing 2 so that didn't seem to belong

I like this.. it's a unique idea and you did a good job... I really like your word choice it's very sophisticated which is a great comparison to the idea of someone coloring

YAY crayons!

i think i's awesome. but i think youre awesomer.

I think it's pretty sweet :)