Well, this is definately something different--different is good. I like the title 'Temptation', that word caught my attention. Overall I like how you described the things that make you tempted. Nice work.

I like this a lot. I love how you describe the different ways you are tempted, and then you say even the eyes are too much. I love the end the most though, but I think it would work just as well if "I am tempted" and "And you are my temptress" were on the same line.