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| Lurid Black 2008-03-15 ch 1,  | abuseLoved it, would the highlighted words signify strength or fear? Nvm, great work |
| Laurena 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abusei can see whts on ur mind... i thought it was gonna be about love...no wonder ur initials are bj...jk i really loved actually, i like how the bolds and underlines imphasize certain words, its amazing, im prolly gonna copy u in the near future... |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abuseOk in the beginning I would put a period after all mine and a comma after laid it's claims because I think that you keeping one thing finishes that idea. Please, don’t take it/And just throw it away.. ending a line with take it is odd because you want them to take it.. I might just do Please, don't throw it away I saved it for me/Before I gave it to you... you kinda already said this... I dont think it needs to be repeated I wasn't expecting the ending.. I assumed it was your heart, so that was a really interesting... the only thing is the bolding and underlining and italicizing was a bit much I believe... other than that thought it was a really great piece |
| Ramenluver 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this. All the bolding and italics and underlining really worked to its advantage, and I was surprised that it was talking about virginity. Great poem. ^ ^ |