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| Marajohuiki 2008-03-28 ch 1,  | abuseA quaint tale. Not intensely intriguing, mind, but easy to get through for the most part (although a couple of big words near the beginning tripped my mind up a bit). There's a nice, solid foundation here, and it's something you could build on, if you wanted to, though it does work nicely as a oneshot. Good job. :) |