 Aibari 2008-02-28 . chapter 1So short! -poke-
Hardcore Medieval fiction has never been my cup of tea, but I like this. :)
You might want to watch your sentence lenght - they're a bit on the long-ish side. And it's "burgundy".
Why waste poison on arrows that're ceremonial?
Al deserves to get his arse handed to him, really. He almost reminds me of Kuzco, with his selfish bastardness. (Y'know, the llama?) And so, a Great Tale Of Self-Realisation Is Called For. Please? Or at least a tiny **-slap?
Poor Ranulf. Did he have -any- idea what he was getting himself into?
Yes, TBC. X) |